Please review my poem and comment! Thanks:)?
_________________ When it was raining rainbows sprayed molten earth tulips bloom in their re-birth; raindrops fell Silver, soil remediation, Raising the smell of freshly wet sand. Thousand mirage in the mirror drops tremble Kissing goodbye to the leaf-tops, Misty silk coating on each glass embraced by the cool winds bring rain. Waking colors, the many trance, peacocks began their dance of delirium Angels beat their drums of the sky, flashing sparks that rain bid God welcome. Nimbus tears gutted one and all they can influence the course of their fall, silver crystals covered peak on earth, calming and healing and relaxation.
Your poem was wonderful! I knew from the first verse it would be wonderful. Your poem has all the qualities a good poem. Rhythm-Your poem has great rhythm and rhyme. Apart from the third stanza, the last line too many syllables and reject this kind of verse, if you want to improve your time even trying To change this line. Vocabulary-your vocabulary in this poem is amazing and intense. He takes the reader on every scene described. Your imagery figurative language in this poem is wonderful. MAPS, an acronym representing the metaphor, alliteration, personification and simile. Usually you the personification and metaphors for the most part. Be proud, because metaphors is the hardest of all, you manage them! GREAT JOB! Well done:)
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